A Limerick on the Lord's Day

(based on 2Kgs. 2.23-5)

Elisha was made fun of 'cause he was bald
But when it happened, on bears he called
Like when the youth group made fun
And then quickly turned to run
The sight was grizzly, those kids were mauled


  1. Brother man, you gotta work on your limericks! They have a strict form and your rhythm is off.

    Like this...

    There once was a girl named Donna
    Of whom I am still quite fonda
    She's smart and purty
    Even tho' she's now 40
    So give her a hug, if you wanna.

    Sorry. It's the teacher in me.

  2. How's this...

    There once was a prophet named Elisha
    Whom some brats were not very nice ta
    The names he was called
    Included "chubby" and "bald"
    But the kids by a bear were set flight ta

    okay, weak ending...

  3. dan,
    i didn't know i was so off, thanks for pointing this out. what, though, is the strict form? syallable wise, it sounds like your first one is 8, 8, 5, 7, 9. your second one is 10, 9, 5, 7, 10. what exactly is the rhythm? help a brotha out. your elisha rendition is great!

  4. You weren't so far off, not any further than mine, probably. Just giving you grief.

    Here's what wikipedia has to say about the form:

    A limerick has five lines, with three metrical feet in the first, second and fifth lines and two metrical feet in the third and fourth lines. A variety of types of metrical foot can be used, but the most typical are the amphibrach (a stressed syllable between two unstressed syllables) and the anapaest (two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed syllable).

    Whatever that means...

    Here's an untraditional one that I like:

    There once was a man from the sticks
    Who liked to compose limericks.
    But he failed at the sport,
    For he wrote 'em too short.

  5. dan,
    that limerick is awesome, i love it!

    i'll keep workin' at it.