There once was a prophet named Elisha Whom some brats were not very nice ta The names he was called Included "chubby" and "bald" But the kids by a bear were set flight ta
dan, i didn't know i was so off, thanks for pointing this out. what, though, is the strict form? syallable wise, it sounds like your first one is 8, 8, 5, 7, 9. your second one is 10, 9, 5, 7, 10. what exactly is the rhythm? help a brotha out. your elisha rendition is great!
You weren't so far off, not any further than mine, probably. Just giving you grief.
Here's what wikipedia has to say about the form:
A limerick has five lines, with three metrical feet in the first, second and fifth lines and two metrical feet in the third and fourth lines. A variety of types of metrical foot can be used, but the most typical are the amphibrach (a stressed syllable between two unstressed syllables) and the anapaest (two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed syllable).
Whatever that means...
Here's an untraditional one that I like:
There once was a man from the sticks Who liked to compose limericks. But he failed at the sport, For he wrote 'em too short.
Brother man, you gotta work on your limericks! They have a strict form and your rhythm is off.
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There once was a girl named Donna
Of whom I am still quite fonda
She's smart and purty
Even tho' she's now 40
So give her a hug, if you wanna.
Sorry. It's the teacher in me.
How's this...
ReplyDeleteThere once was a prophet named Elisha
Whom some brats were not very nice ta
The names he was called
Included "chubby" and "bald"
But the kids by a bear were set flight ta
okay, weak ending...
dan,
ReplyDeletei didn't know i was so off, thanks for pointing this out. what, though, is the strict form? syallable wise, it sounds like your first one is 8, 8, 5, 7, 9. your second one is 10, 9, 5, 7, 10. what exactly is the rhythm? help a brotha out. your elisha rendition is great!
You weren't so far off, not any further than mine, probably. Just giving you grief.
ReplyDeleteHere's what wikipedia has to say about the form:
A limerick has five lines, with three metrical feet in the first, second and fifth lines and two metrical feet in the third and fourth lines. A variety of types of metrical foot can be used, but the most typical are the amphibrach (a stressed syllable between two unstressed syllables) and the anapaest (two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed syllable).
Whatever that means...
Here's an untraditional one that I like:
There once was a man from the sticks
Who liked to compose limericks.
But he failed at the sport,
For he wrote 'em too short.
dan,
ReplyDeletethat limerick is awesome, i love it!
i'll keep workin' at it.